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Hello, yes it happened with Hunters ! I finally solved the problem by checking commentaries on other games and someone had a tip : open Show Package Contents>Content>MacOS> and click on the app. It starts with the terminal. I don't know why it was blocked. Thank you for your response :)

Hello there,

I discovered today that Demonheart had a sequel, so here I am, soooo excited !! But when I run the game witch my Mac (version is ok, 10.15.17 Catalina) from Itch io, I have a message that appears either after the intro, or when I click on settings : "Unkown error Error:EROFS: read-only file system, mkdir/private/var/folders etc.." (it's a bit long to copy all but if you need to, I will do it)

I see that the version has been released 8 days ago so maybe there is a problem ? I played with the same computer at several games and everything is cool. Do you know what's wrong ?

Thank you !!

Bonjour, 

Il est rare, voire inédit, de découvrir un otome game français sur itch.io. Quelle n'a donc pas été ma surprise en voyant une telle recommandation sur le forum d'AS ^^

J'ai donc joué aux 7 chapitres dans la foulée, et forcément il fallait venir donner un petit avis !

Tout d'abord je voudrais vous féliciter. Vraiment, bravo. Ce jeu est pour vous un hobby de ce que j'ai lu, et vous le rendez accessible gratuitement, c'est très honorable. Honnêtement, c'est un superbe travail quand on sait que vous travaillez seul. Les graphismes sont aboutis : les personnages sont mignons tout plein - en plus de leur grande diversité -, le jeu coloré, lumineux... Et c'est un plus de pouvoir avoir une musique en fond, mais d'ailleurs ne peut-on pas la changer en cours d'histoire ? (je n'ai pas trouvé cette possibilité)

J'ai eu un peu de mal au début à cibler qui étaient les crush. Pour éviter le spoil, je me contenterai de dire que j'ai été agréablement surprise d'y voir de la bisexualité. On sent que vous vous êtes inspirés d'AS, avec même un petit clin d'oeil amusant dans un choix, et l'on sait que l'orientation sexuelle est une nouveauté là-bas, vous les avez donc devancés !

Cela dit, le public visé se place dans la pré-adolescence, voire l'adolescence ; il faut avouer que le contenu est peu adapté pour des adultes, mêmes jeunes, car on ne peut pas vraiment jouir d'une profondeur, ni d'une subtilité dans les interactions. Si on peut apprécier l'ambivalence chez certains personnages, elle n'est pas suffisamment creusée, et on note un manque de personnalité général.

Je suis donc assez curieuse de voir comment la romance va être gérée.

Loin de là l'idée de vous vexer surtout ! Je suis consciente que vous travaillez SEUL, pour un premier jeu, et donc un univers aussi travaillé est magnifique ! Cela doit être très difficile d'assurer à la fois le rôle de scénariste, de designer, développeur, et qu'en sais-je... Evidemment qu'il est impossible de se focaliser sur chaque point pour faire tourner la machine... L'important est de se faire plaisir avant tout.

Je tenais donc à vous encourager vivement sur cette voie ! Développer ce projet sera certainement très formateur et c'est admirable quand on imagine tout l'investissement, personnel, pour sa conception.

Je le recommanderai à d'autres pour le faire connaître :)

Bravo, encore une fois, pour être arrivé si loin ! Et merci de permettre à tous d'y jouer !

Très bonne continuation pour votre petite perle.

Hey ! Thanks for answering, it's a really cute attention that we don't see everywhere ! Yep, I slept 3 hours but it worthed it, hehe. I read more comments since yesterday and I see that I'm not the only one who was such attracted by your story to play aaaall the night.

Oh, I'm really sorry if I offended you. I didn't know that you were Indonesian (or almost), and everything makes sense now. I really didn't replace the story in the right context and, well, when I finally read the encyclopedia given with the game, I felt a little embarrassed for saying what I said. And I didn't know either Tamara was from the same culture >< So, excuse me.

I saw that you worked on an other project more or less linked with "the Winged Ones". I don't want to play the demo since the game isn't finished yet and I'm afraid to become a big fan too early haha (and to live with furious impatience until it's out). But I'm so glad that there will be some informations about "the Winged Ones" ! I admire your universe and  I want to learn more and more.

I wish you to succeed in your projects. All of the critics are throwing to improve it, but it's an amazing job for a game meant to be free. By the way, I wanted to really thank you for making it free ! It was such an adventure, you deserve to be known and to have some contributions (I'll talk about you with some of my acquaintances but I don't promise you a new public if they don't like playing in english :P)

So, see you again. :)

Hello, there.
I finished your game with the three characters in 24 hours, so here I am...
To begin with, you have to know that I'm french and that we don't have many otome games in our language (and excuse the faults in this message haha). That's why I first came here and looked for a good game, without waiting time to play.

I LOVED it. My god, just addictive.

1. Which bachelor you like the most? and why?
I support... MITRA !! Yay, Mitra is my looover ! <3 <3 <3 Oh my god, really, at first I was not interested in him, he was too « good-guy » and, frankly, I'm not a fan of kids, while he's always talking about family, projecting himself, etc.... That's the only negative point about his character, to me. The fact is, I totally fucked up with the Reska's route the first time (I couldn't even get to know him, haha, because I chose to be honest) and I always picked up the good choices so I would meet Mitra, without especially wanting it. Hehe, that's the proof I was meant to be his lover. Gradually, I learned to like him. He's sooo sweet (with his little feathers in his hair, aaawh <3), caring, kind, protective without being annoying, comprehensive. Oh, and I find that most of the romantic scenes were in his route, like the wing's performance (<3 !!) and the discussion in the burnt forest, you know after the first attack. Besides, after playing with all the guys, I feel a lot more close to everyone in Mitra's route, because we spent time with Avians, with Yuda, Asih, etc... since Mitra is a chief.

On the contrary, in Reska's route, I really felt like we didn't give a shit about Avians, we never spent time with them, we lied to them, we stole, ... that was too bad. I have to say, I was a little decieved by the story with Reska. I read so many commentaries which sayed that they loved Mitra before meeting with Reska ! He's cute too but nah. Maybe to possessive and that attitude annoys me. I mean, we're free to do what we want... However the love story is a bit more « mature » in his route, when we can't have that with Mitra (grr).

Then, there is Rama. Rama was a good surprise too. His background is really sad and coherent, I didn't expect that (and I didn't expect his fate in others guys'route ! I was like « What. No way, whaaaat »:O when Mitra came back with a piece of his loincloth.

2. Overall, what do you think about this visual novel? and what element stands out the most? (art? story? character?)

Ah, I don't know what to begin with ! This was really good ! I NEED to say it : the Avians are beautiful ! Asih is magnificient as hell ! I fell in love with her the minute she appeared on the screen.
I didn't like Tamara's design, with blue hair (yurk) and the colors of her clothes that didn't match. Besides, her pony tail and her scarf which were flotting in the air... I know that you probably wanted to make her like a manga heroin, but it's just that I don't like mangas anymore, so it's personnal. :) But if we compare with Asih, her design seems less worked.
The bachelors were great, especially Mitra (omg, his wings !! Omg, his eyes ! Mitraaa <3). Howerer I found them a little slim, even Mitra, who is supposed to be a warrior.

The writing was surprisingly good. No offense but in France, we don't find a game with this quality very often. I was so immersed in the story ! Sometimes I laughed, I shivered, my eyes got wet, I was chocked, I fangirled, ... That's a very good point, to manage to reach the fellings of your players by your work. Bravo ! What else... ? The story is addictive. A little simple but addictive. Simple because I think that the « war » goes too quick and is simply resolved. Tamara didn't do miracles by her own. At the end, we don't understand WHY the goddess chose her. She just threw a rock, what anyone could have done, and yet this is in Mitra's story ; with Reksa or Rama, her intervention is a little more useless.

Last but not least, the MUSICS were magic ! The game wouldn't be what is it, if the soundtrack wasn’t there. It really created an ambiance and fitted with the scenes. I have shivers when I rethink to some moments with Mitra... Maybe I'll download them later, if I can find them.

3. Do you have any question or constructive critiques? I will read all the comments and reply to them like I do in Lemmasoft.

Yeah, it's a fact that french people are known to complain a lot. So here are my questions and critics to maybe help you to improve your work in the future :)

I noticed some incoherences or mysteries unsolved. What with the dream in which Tamara hears someone being tortured ?! When I was with Mitra, I thought that maybe this was part of Reska or Rama's route, but no.
Then, there is the past of Tamara. She confesses it with Mitra and Rama but this is completely forgotten in Reska's story. Is that normal ?
Something else : when I played with Reska, Tamara didn't give a shit about Rama, and then we end up helping him and bringing him meat. That was strange. ^^
On this matter, it's a shame that we can't have some informations if we're not playing with the right bachelor. For example, the explanations around Rama's death. Rama is forgotten some days after it, and we can never discover why he wanted so much death. It would be great to speak about it, but not entirely of course...

I have nevertheless a last critique. So, here, I don't know if I react like that because I'm french (and annoying) or not, because no one spoke about the following subject until me xD One thing bothered me in your story : the women's condition. God, we really have an image so that the wife is here to cook, to do laundries, etc... Each time we saw Asih, she talked about house chores : « dinner is almost ready », « ah ! come one, breakfast is ready ! » like she does nothing else, and she's so weak, not physically but in her personality too... I hated that. I felt sometimes some observations from our protagonist, with a little irony (« it was like she taught me to be a good wife »), but it wasn't enough. Maybe it's their society to live this way – traditionally - , but Tamara seemed not really bothered. And the guys are sooo paternalist !

I finish this part on this : in my mind, the love story is too « cuty ». I mean the sexuality seems a taboo, when all the blood, the fights, the deaths and the war subject are for a mature public, so I don't understand this choice x)

I hope that my last remarks will not upset you. I really loved your game and I just wish that my commentary will help you for – maybe – another project.

4. Last but not least, if I make another visual novel, will you consider buying it? via patreon or kickstarter that is (since I need to eat, electricity, and such things when I make VNs xD)

Yeah, of course, if I have time to. I discovered english otome games ;)

THANK YOU for your work. Really. I lived a great adventure, which I won't forget and I'm sad to think that my commentary will conclude your wonderful story ! (I already miss Mitra :( hehe, I'll replay it one day)

Bye. :)